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 MBA Essays

Let I never write "metropolis" for seven cents,
because I can get the same money for "city."
— Mark Twain

Editing includes specific frameworks for school/s chosen; short-, mid-, and long-term goals; prompts such as a time of failure and your reaction; greatest accomplishment and/or influences; resumes; letters of recommendation, etc. Editing ensures essays at or under prescribed word counts and as many drafts as necessary to satisfy editor and client. See detailed examples of how I work with clients.

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During the seven years I’ve worked as a commercial banker, I’ve seen many companies coming and going, paying attention to all the positive things they did to become successful and all the wrong things they did. I would like to go into consulting, working for a top-level consulting firm at the European market. After that I would request to be moved to the Latin American region, taking back what I learned at X and in Europe, and used to improve quality of Latin American companies. I am very interested in customer support and customer relationship management.
My short-term goals are to get the most from my X education and from the experience in my first years in consulting at a world class consulting company. Later I would like to manage the consulting operation for a wider area, probably a whole country or region of Latin America. Finally I will go back to my home country, going into public service or politics, helping to improve the quality of life of the people from the country, taking it to a level of international competitiveness.
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After graduation I plan to become a project manager for a multinational consulting firm, working in the design, organization and implementation of information technology projects in the banking and financial industry in Europe and later Latin America. In this position I will gain the kind of experience that will lead into my mid-term goal of managing consulting operations for a wider area, likely for an entire country or region of Latin America. My long-term goal is to return to X to enter public service or politics, where I will share my professional knowledge and experience in international competition to help improve the quality of life in my homeland. 108 words

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